Hey George! I really like how you did the checkers background and the pictures are really cool. Maybe next time read it again because the second line is supposed to have 7 syllables and you have 8. And the last line is supposed to have 5 and you have 4. If you can come and check my blog out. http://sstinaj.blogspot.co.nz/ Tina J:)
Hi George, I like the background and the detail but you might want to check your syllables! In the second sentence you need 7 syllables, you have 8. And also in the third sentence you have 4 syllables, you need 5! Come check out my blog at http://sssophiah.blogspot.co.nz/ From Sophia Hasan-Stein.
Hi George O I really like the theme of it and I AM SCARED OF HEIGHTS One thing you could work on would be to check your syllabus. On your second line you have 8 instead of 7 syllables Please come and have a look at my blog at http://sschristopherg.blogspot.co.nz/ Thank you Christopher graham
Hi George I really like the presentation of your haiku. Next time check your syllables because you don't have the right amount in some sentences. Come check out my blog at http://ssjennae.blogspot.co.nz/ Thanks Jenna
Hi George I really like the presentation of your haiku. Next time check your syllables because you don't have the right amount in some sentences. Come check out my blog at http://ssjennae.blogspot.co.nz/ Thanks Jenna
Hey George!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you did the checkers background and the pictures are really cool. Maybe next time read it again because the second line is supposed to have 7 syllables and you have 8. And the last line is supposed to have 5 and you have 4.
If you can come and check my blog out. http://sstinaj.blogspot.co.nz/
Tina J:)
Hi george i really like how you have set this out. i like the presentation and the effort you put into it well done.
ReplyDeleteHi george i really like how you have set this out. i like the presentation and the effort you put into it well done.
ReplyDeleteHi George,
ReplyDeleteI like the background and the detail but you might want to check your syllables! In the second sentence you need 7 syllables, you have 8. And also in the third sentence you have 4 syllables, you need 5!
Come check out my blog at
http://sssophiah.blogspot.co.nz/
From Sophia Hasan-Stein.
Hi George O
ReplyDeleteI really like the theme of it and I AM SCARED OF HEIGHTS
One thing you could work on would be to check your syllabus. On your second line you have 8 instead of 7 syllables
Please come and have a look at my blog at http://sschristopherg.blogspot.co.nz/
Thank you Christopher graham
Hi George
ReplyDeleteI really like the presentation of your haiku. Next time check your syllables because you don't have the right amount in some sentences.
Come check out my blog at http://ssjennae.blogspot.co.nz/
Thanks Jenna
Hi George
ReplyDeleteI really like the presentation of your haiku. Next time check your syllables because you don't have the right amount in some sentences.
Come check out my blog at http://ssjennae.blogspot.co.nz/
Thanks Jenna